Task Response
band 6.0“I agree with this idea, because it makes cities cleaner and quieter, but I also think it can cause problems for people who cannot walk far.”
- Why
- The position is stated, but it is split between agreeing and doubting. Examiners look for one clear view that the whole essay keeps defending.
- Suggestion
- Pick the side you can support best and move the concern about walking distance into a later paragraph as a limit on your view.
- Rewrite example (this sentence only)
- I agree that cities should ban private cars from their centres, although the ban must come with good transport for people who cannot walk far.